Amendments and Reflections

.To begin with our introduction was going to consist of 5 different establishing shots, but because this took took up too much time of our introduction and the transition between them was too smooth, we have cut this down to 1 sole establishing shot to set the scene, along with a couple of slides before hand for our titles. This therefore will be cutting the time from 35 seconds for establishing shots to 6 seconds, and hopefully this will make the introduction more fast moving and intense.
.In shot 7, Man 1 will not turn off a radio, although the music will stop at this point.
.There won't be a shot of Man 2 walking off a train, instead the scene will cut from the train stopping at the station, to him walking next to the train as it makes its exit from the scene.
.There will be no close up of a knife in Man 2's pocket as this shot was unfortunately lost during editing.
.Man 1 will have less essentials in his house, no chair, clock or desk will be added, thefore Man 1 will be writing with pen and paper on the floor in an empty room, and there will be no focus of a clock in shot 9.
.We thought that watching the train approach the station rather than watching the opposite direction of the train tracks would be more effective as there is no need for surrealism at this point.
.Red converses were substituted for dc skater trainers to make Man 1 look more common and run dowm, unfortunately we do recognise that there will not be an as stronger reference to the theme of red he will be wearing, however we hope that the reference and boldness of the red t-shirt will be impacting enough.
.We have made the transition speed of shots quicker to make the introduction more intense.
.We have had to change the intended soundtrack because of copyright protection.